Been fighting for a while with a Seuss style poem for kids – a what do you want to be when you grow up sort of poem. I have been totally dissatisfied with the available books on this topic – they replay the same jobs over and over – doctor, lawyer, policeman, teacher, fireman. Since I wasn’t happy with what I found, I started my own.
This is the first few stanzas, many, many more in varying stages, but I want to get a little feedback on readability and flow – any comments at all would be greatly appreciated.
What Do You Want To BE?
Are you ready, my dear,
for the world’s greatest game?
For imagining passion, peace, fortune or fame?
It’s so easy to play
for there aren’t any rules.
No game boards, no pieces, and no need for tools.
Just answer when asked,
And right away you will win!
Just listen each day, for the game to begin.
It will come, don’t you know
from nearly every direction.
It’s the most open, amazing, inspiring question.
What…do you. . .want…to BE?
Have you been asked yet?
What’d you say?
Did your imagination run wild?
Was it crazy? Adventurous? Or quiet and mild?
Did you know right away?
Did you take time to think?
Was it the same answer as last time, or entirely new?
Or was it the first time ever, that someone asked you. . .
What…do you…want…to BE?
There are so many things
That a be-er can be!
All kinds of great choices between earth, sky and sea!
There’s the classics, of course.
But there are so many more,
the list could pile up in stacks on the floor.
You could be a high-up things reacher.
Pick apples! Pick pears!
And speaking of pairs
Do you now how many things
start off as a pair?
You could be a pair pairer and match up those things!
Mittens and socks, and of course all your pants
Boots, shoes and slippers and new car headlamps!
The list just keeps going,
Getting bigger and longer
as you get smarter and stronger.